Even though I didn’t like the first book in the series, I decided to
continue, because I already own the rest of it, and they are relatively
short. Unfortunately, this book didn’t fare any better. The writing is
the first obstacle, as it’s immature and unrefined, sounding like a
casual conversation between preteens, and with many short sentences that
should punctuate the urgency, but sound ridiculous. The author repeats
things over and over again, as if she’s just picked up the book again
after months and had to remind us/her of what happened. We know they are
on an alien planet, and have traveled through time. We don’t need the
reminder so many times through the book and even almost at the end.
There are very many continuity glitches and assumptions that come out of
nowhere, not to mention that the two main characters never question
anything (even the visions, which they weep over). The story itself
isn’t terrible, but doesn’t progress. Nida and Carson love each other,
though they keep denying it in the worst possible thoughts and dialog.
There is no advancement on that front. They travel to a nearby city
after adopting the fake skin and clothing of the people, and the people
aren’t suspicious though she blushes red instead of green due to her
blood color, and any other number of things. Almost immediately, they
get in with the resistance, because the entity wishes it, and things go
wrong from there. We know because the author continues to tell us this
at the end of multiple chapters. I wish the alien planet had seemed
alien, but instead seemed like an inept 1940s Nazi city with the same
kind of technology, weapons, vehicles, and more. Nida needs a confidence
booster, and I think she gets that here, while Carson is a terrible
lieutenant, throwing away years of training in the first crisis he
encounters, and never thinking things through. It nearly costs him his
life, except that Nida conveniently finds her own power for no reason at
all at that very moment.
Spoiler review:
At one time, I would have loved to nitpick my way through a book like
this. It would have filled a whole notebook with items to complain
about. It’s not worth spending the time. As described above, the writing
was terrible, as if dictated by a couple of preteens while talking to
each other. As the first book was like that, I wasn’t overly surprised.
I did, however, want to finish it as quickly as possible. The
tagline for this series is that Nida is the worst cadet in a thousand
years. I guess it’s become a joke for the author, because almost every
chapter repeats it, until in the end, Carson admits that she isn’t! I
hope the author will now stop using the phrase, which got tired the
first time it was used.
The simplistic way Nida and Carson did
things was tiring, but in some ways they did think a couple of things
through. Nida copied pretty clothing from somewhere, but it turns out
that prostitutes are the ones who cover up, and normal women wear
thongs. This premise is used to draw laughs (supposedly), and to bring
out some sexual tension (which it doesn’t), except that Nida seems to be
wearing normal clothes and be fully covered even after she removes it,
and it never comes up in combat situations, though she can apparently
dodge bullets.
The scenes in the house where they find clothes
and learn a bit of the language, and the following scenes in the forest,
were interminable, as they repeated the same information and dialog over and over, as if
they can reason anything out that way. Finally, when they decide to go,
they end up saving a woman (no details as what she might or might not be
wearing) from a rabid animal. As if that proves they are rebels, she
leads them directly to the rebellion. While the author spent a lot of
time telling us that they were on an alien planet and wouldn’t
understand its customs, it seemed like they’d been transported to Earth
of the 1940s. The world was completely recognisable, described as
rectangular prefab buildings, trucks with tires, guns with bullets and
blanks, and an industrial smell. It’s a chauvinistic society that covers
up freedoms, so it should be difficult to hide a rebellion in the walls
and pipes of the city, yet this one does. The author calls it fascist at
least once, but there’s no proof of that, either.
At least the
rebels are suspicious, but the two people who fight (Cara) and question
(Varo) them turn out to be either traitors or possibly aliens
themselves. It’s not clear. I’ll be more impressed if Varo ends up being
one of the barbarians from the end of the last book. I was hoping Cara would be,
also, but unfortunately she was just a triple-agent, pretending to work
for the rebels. No wonder nobody came looking for her when she left her
post and never returned.
The entire mission was to look for a
time gate, so they plan to infiltrate the secret service building, where
they think the government might be keeping information on strange
phenomena, like everything sucked in and shooting toward an affected person. Why do
they make this assumption, that the entity had influence in this time?
Maybe it because the entity tells them this, but usually when asked
these questions it shrugs the equivalent of its shoulders and says it
doesn’t know. That’s too bad, because when Nida taps into its power, she
realizes that she can build her own time gate with her mind –no
materials necessary. As far as missions go, this one was a waste.
I think the purpose of the story might have been to get Nida so
frustrated and so close to death that she had to figure out how to take
control of the entity. It obviously doesn’t know what it’s doing. So
Nida had to go through a nightmare situation, where she was separated
from Carson, allowed Carson to go into a trap with Cara, escaped on her
own (disabling Varo), crossed paths with Carson, and allowed him to be
caught, which would bring her to the edge, and allowing her to tap the
entity. Unfortunately, none of it worked, because the motivations made
no sense.
By the time the final battle takes place, with Nida on
the roof, captured by Cara, then Carson on the roof, unbelievably caught
again by Cara, I was just trying to get to the end. I had to roll my
eyes when the magical weapon of the entity stops working for Carson just
at the wrong moment. I was expecting some connection to the entity or
another explanation, but instead it starts working again when Cara
steals it from him. Is she so much stronger than Carson that she could
pry it from his fingers, despite it not being protected by his armor?
Nida also gets it to work, killing Cara after being hit and bones broken
multiple times. No explanation given.
I still don’t know anything
about this alien planet, and I didn't retain any of the information given through to the end of the book, except that they are willing to use
their guns. I think there might be a mystery here when they refer to
Nida being Touched, and visions of the future, but I’m not convinced the
author will follow up on it.
Speaking of visions, Nida goes into several trances, each one showing a
little more of the vision she sees. It turns out that the Confederation
ships will be devastated in a war around this planet in the future. Both
she and Carson are driven to tears about the implications, but they
never question it, never talk about it, never wonder if or how they can
change it, or if they can make use of the knowledge. Again, it's
frustrating, because these are things I would expect from a trained
military person.
Then we get to the romance. There is lingering unresolved romantic and
sexual pseudo-tension all throughout. At least I believe that's the
author's intention. None of it works, from Carson's distraction (how old
is he, anyway?), lingering touches where they each tell themselves they
shouldn't (again, why not?). Nida gets jealous, even though she has
convinced herself that Carson can never be hers. These people need a
psychological evaluation before going through the Academy.
I'm still not a fan of this author's writing, but I will continue to the
end of the series because I already own the ebooks, and given that I'm
halfway there, I'll be curious if there's a real ending.